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| August 03, 2008 | ||
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| Balto/TLK Source Member |
nice |
| July 14, 2008 | ||
that game was fun good job |
| June 07, 2008 | ||
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RayJ, I could read it and follow it. And I knew what was going on. |
| March 23, 2008 | ||
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better grammar but good anyways |
| March 09, 2008 | ||
Webranker | ||
| Webranker |
Try to use better grammer next time. Great gamebook though! |
| February 19, 2008 | ||
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Can I offer some constructive critique? I think you might want to
try practicing and studying a bit more grammar and spelling so it's easier to understand your story. You might want to add more actions, or more information to the actions you have. The overall story was too hard to follow with the start, and I really had no idea what was going on... My two cents. |